This is a poem from April 2016 that I am linking to Björn’s dVerse prompt on use of metaphor. I have been wanting to show it to my dVerse friends for a while. I will let y’all figure out the metaphors….
says the girl in the chrysalis of jade…
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Here is the link to the dVerse prompt, join us there as we flit about deciding what’s what.
An excellent extended metaphor, Lona! I love the image of the monarch butterflies
‘Inching along the edges of their
Milkweed world
Devouring their green nursery with a
Grim and fervent appetite’
but am entranced by the mystery of the leathered jade chrysalis. I love the way you describe it as ‘A translucent membrane
Of papered expectation
…
Just hanging there
Surrounded by the atmosphere and
Sunlight, and merely the very
Cosmos whirring in oblivious
Disregard around this
Point of breathing stillness’,
I like how you have framed this – opening with what to me is the delight parents take in watching their children blossom. The second part is more personal – hesitant – the description tenderly beautiful – a reminder that the transformation, for all of us, is unique.
SMiLes.. Lona.. For tHere Is A Cocoon
At Least That Lives in Most
of Us For Butterfly
or Perhaps
A Bear
Hibernating
in the Winter
Maybe Even
A Mama Grizzly
Bare but it’s True
Some Folks Fail to
Touch Their Butterfly
Or Never Awaken the
Grizzly Hibernating
Within until he
Wakes up
Inside
us
And we Are
Terrified to See
He Lives with no
Assistance From Us
or the Butterfly Same
Stuck in a Cocoon So Long
The Opaque Window to Love
Has Grown Cold And too Frigid to Open Up,,
But Still
THere is
Change
And Still tHeRe
is Hope For Change
Is A GreaTesT GiFT oF aLL..:)
I love the transformation of the monarch with:
The sharp-needled evergreeens
For a season with a crawling
Gown of autumn fire.
The second part, was for me, a moment of thoughtful reflection & deep awareness:
Point of breathing stillness,
Where silent wings simply
Lie enfolded upon a
Slowly beating heart.
Thank you Grace. This is the most essentially personal piece I have written. I am glad you liked the part with the Mariposas. These are amazing creatures, but I guess we can be also. But sometimes one must be still. Thanks again. 🦋
This reminded me that change may not be easy, but sometimes it’s ok, and necessary, to retreat into the change, if that makes sense. We can get too caught up in the greed of doing, in the need to be beautiful, all of that, and sometimes we need to just be still.
I am glad you noticed the larvae, (Those beautiful yellow, white, black striped babies get overlooked), in noticing the greed of doing. Stillness has its place, sometimes without it we will have never moved to the next step. This was a meaningful reading from you Sarah, thanks 💜
I love how you turned this from the butterfly to the chrysalis, which I read as the value of nurturing hope and possibilities rather than just enjoying fulfillment (which is often too short anyway)
Yes, I am so glad you saw that disconnect in chronology. I did not do this in sequence from larva to pupae to adult… since it is a poem primarily about the chrysalis, where I am living now for many years, and the chrysalis is usually unseen and hidden, and oh so beautiful. Thank you for the notice and for the prompt. I am sorry I did not do a new poem for the prompt, but I have wanted to show this to y’all for a while, and this seemed like the perfect time. Thank you friend.
My sons and I have raised some monarchs, from egg to caterpillar to chrysalis to butterfly and they are beautiful at every stage! I know from my own life, God’s Spirit can work heart changes and we just need to be still. A gorgeous poem, Lona!
Thank you Lynn. And I am so glad you have had that experience with your sons. It was one of the highlights of my life growing up in Utah, raising a monarch with my mother when I was five. I remember watching it pump its wings and fly away finally. Here I Alabama,, we have a lot of Swallowtails, but I have only seen a Monarch, that I remember, once. I miss them. I am saddened that I just saw a study that suggests there population may have declined by 80% due to milkweed habitat destruction, which panics me no end. I think I am going to try to plant some milkweed in my little corners here and see if some show up. I am grateful for God’s work in this little creature, and in our little heart corners as well. Thank you.
crawling gown, papered expectation, point of breathing stillness – particularly struck me but the whole poem is utterly beautiful and you took this beloved, well-worn image and made it fresh and new- alive with veriditas and meaning. Hooray – you make my poet heart rejoice!
Thank You Christine, so GREAT to meet you, and thank you for the lovely words. The Monarchs are beloved, it is very meaningful to me that I could make this live a bit for you. Rejoicing right backatcha 😉
This is such a beautiful poem, a metaphor of life. I don’t think anyone’s life is as straightforward as it may seem from birth through many stages and death. I imagine we all go through chrysalis periods of sorts, but of course, though this has a very personal meaning for you.
And I like that there’s a sense of stillness, or calm, which is beautiful in itself, but that something is happening beneath the surface. (And back to transitions. . .). 🙂
Thank you friend. Coming to feel a measure of calm rather than entrapment in the protracted pupae stage has been a blessing to me, my life has competing imperatives, but at least I have been blessed with calm that comes with affirmations like that found in your comment. I am also grateful that you some universality here too. (Eyes a tad damp just now to be truthful) 💜
Nice lines: “Cosmos whirring in oblivious
Disregard around this
Point of breathing stillness”
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Thanks Frank 🙂
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An excellent extended metaphor, Lona! I love the image of the monarch butterflies
‘Inching along the edges of their
Milkweed world
Devouring their green nursery with a
Grim and fervent appetite’
but am entranced by the mystery of the leathered jade chrysalis. I love the way you describe it as ‘A translucent membrane
Of papered expectation
…
Just hanging there
Surrounded by the atmosphere and
Sunlight, and merely the very
Cosmos whirring in oblivious
Disregard around this
Point of breathing stillness’,
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Thank you Kim.
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a beautiful description of our position in the fabric of life,we at times flourish, at time just hanging on till the next stage occurs.
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Yes Gina, and I love the hope woven into your reading, thank you!
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so much my pleasure to feel that hope
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Magical metamorphosis in metaphor – especially like ‘this
Point of breathing stillness,’
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Thank you Laura, so nice to see you 🙋🏻♀️
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I like how you have framed this – opening with what to me is the delight parents take in watching their children blossom. The second part is more personal – hesitant – the description tenderly beautiful – a reminder that the transformation, for all of us, is unique.
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Beautiful and thoughtful reading VK, thank you so much.
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You are most welcome.
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SMiLes.. Lona.. For tHere Is A Cocoon
At Least That Lives in Most
of Us For Butterfly
or Perhaps
A Bear
Hibernating
in the Winter
Maybe Even
A Mama Grizzly
Bare but it’s True
Some Folks Fail to
Touch Their Butterfly
Or Never Awaken the
Grizzly Hibernating
Within until he
Wakes up
Inside
us
And we Are
Terrified to See
He Lives with no
Assistance From Us
or the Butterfly Same
Stuck in a Cocoon So Long
The Opaque Window to Love
Has Grown Cold And too Frigid to Open Up,,
But Still
THere is
Change
And Still tHeRe
is Hope For Change
Is A GreaTesT GiFT oF aLL..:)
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Hope and love , both are key, thank you Friend
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SMiLes..
Welcome
Lona..:)
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🙋🏻♀️🦋
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😄🙌🌳
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A beautiful observation of the chrysalis. It will take me a little time to unravel it.
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They do take time. I have always thought the monarch chrysalis was one of prettiest little jewels in nature. Thank you Mary 🙂
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I love the transformation of the monarch with:
The sharp-needled evergreeens
For a season with a crawling
Gown of autumn fire.
The second part, was for me, a moment of thoughtful reflection & deep awareness:
Point of breathing stillness,
Where silent wings simply
Lie enfolded upon a
Slowly beating heart.
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Thank you Grace. This is the most essentially personal piece I have written. I am glad you liked the part with the Mariposas. These are amazing creatures, but I guess we can be also. But sometimes one must be still. Thanks again. 🦋
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This reminded me that change may not be easy, but sometimes it’s ok, and necessary, to retreat into the change, if that makes sense. We can get too caught up in the greed of doing, in the need to be beautiful, all of that, and sometimes we need to just be still.
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I am glad you noticed the larvae, (Those beautiful yellow, white, black striped babies get overlooked), in noticing the greed of doing. Stillness has its place, sometimes without it we will have never moved to the next step. This was a meaningful reading from you Sarah, thanks 💜
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Just reread this beautiful comment. Your words have been so helpful to me today
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I love how you turned this from the butterfly to the chrysalis, which I read as the value of nurturing hope and possibilities rather than just enjoying fulfillment (which is often too short anyway)
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Yes, I am so glad you saw that disconnect in chronology. I did not do this in sequence from larva to pupae to adult… since it is a poem primarily about the chrysalis, where I am living now for many years, and the chrysalis is usually unseen and hidden, and oh so beautiful. Thank you for the notice and for the prompt. I am sorry I did not do a new poem for the prompt, but I have wanted to show this to y’all for a while, and this seemed like the perfect time. Thank you friend.
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My sons and I have raised some monarchs, from egg to caterpillar to chrysalis to butterfly and they are beautiful at every stage! I know from my own life, God’s Spirit can work heart changes and we just need to be still. A gorgeous poem, Lona!
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Thank you Lynn. And I am so glad you have had that experience with your sons. It was one of the highlights of my life growing up in Utah, raising a monarch with my mother when I was five. I remember watching it pump its wings and fly away finally. Here I Alabama,, we have a lot of Swallowtails, but I have only seen a Monarch, that I remember, once. I miss them. I am saddened that I just saw a study that suggests there population may have declined by 80% due to milkweed habitat destruction, which panics me no end. I think I am going to try to plant some milkweed in my little corners here and see if some show up. I am grateful for God’s work in this little creature, and in our little heart corners as well. Thank you.
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crawling gown, papered expectation, point of breathing stillness – particularly struck me but the whole poem is utterly beautiful and you took this beloved, well-worn image and made it fresh and new- alive with veriditas and meaning. Hooray – you make my poet heart rejoice!
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Thank You Christine, so GREAT to meet you, and thank you for the lovely words. The Monarchs are beloved, it is very meaningful to me that I could make this live a bit for you. Rejoicing right backatcha 😉
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This is such a beautiful poem, a metaphor of life. I don’t think anyone’s life is as straightforward as it may seem from birth through many stages and death. I imagine we all go through chrysalis periods of sorts, but of course, though this has a very personal meaning for you.
And I like that there’s a sense of stillness, or calm, which is beautiful in itself, but that something is happening beneath the surface. (And back to transitions. . .). 🙂
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Thank you friend. Coming to feel a measure of calm rather than entrapment in the protracted pupae stage has been a blessing to me, my life has competing imperatives, but at least I have been blessed with calm that comes with affirmations like that found in your comment. I am also grateful that you some universality here too. (Eyes a tad damp just now to be truthful) 💜
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Hugs, Lona! ❤
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Oh! Such richness and beauty here. I can tell you are my kind of people. I love it.
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Thank you Linda 🦋
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🐛🦋
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😄
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I’ll never consider the cocoon quite the same again! This is beautifully written!
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Thank you Beverly! 💜
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You have a wonderful writing style Lona! This was a captivating piece – TYFS… 🙂
…rob from http://www.image-verse.com
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Beautifully crafted poem, Lona, full of vivid imagery.
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Thank you Jim! So glad you saw this, be well friend.
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Loved all of your imagery in this one! Well done!
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Thank you Dwight! So glad you read this! 🙋🏻♀️
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Butterflies come in all shapes and sizes!
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They are amazing creatures, it will be interesting to see what emerges from the chrysalis, and if there will be enough blood to pump into the wings
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“Gown of autumn fire” is excellent imagery.
And chrysalis is a perfect metaphor.
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Thank you Ken
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