We gaze out empty to the world and try to see
a plan and place and purpose neatly wrapped
and packaged up in bundles showing how to be
bound up with another, in common orbit mapped.
But only the smallest quanta join together
at distance, not just rounding out their separate rings.
These motes and beams, neither kin or mated to each other,
are true unities dancing, in clouds of lonely things.
We are not tangible until we’re touched or seen
or measured by another. You once lightly pressed
your lips and hands and living into mine between
slopes of slow breathings, slipping now to separate rests.
God moves with less sense than care, the plan’s not scripted clearly from above,
We’re just fragments of the grief we share, melting in the crucibles of love.
– Lona Gynt, January 2019.
Posted for Bjorn’s dVerse invitation for Handbook of Forms. We were invited to write a sonnet. Here is the link.
Poetry Forms – The sonnet
Bjorn also encouraged us to comment on our process of writing in the form. When I write a poem to form, I usually write out pages of free verse or prose on the subject so I can get the ideas or pictures of the subject well established in my mind. I splayed out three pages of free verse in starting this sonnet. I then will re-write the piece over and again several times, listening to the sound intuitively rather than being held captive in counting out the meter or the rhyme, in doing this I preserve the prerogative not to have the essence of the poem subjugated to the form. After this process, however, I will hone and rework and modify to make the poem fit the form, but by then I have a good idea about what the true essence is that needs to be retained. This form leads us on slyly until the turning volta and clinching resolution at the end. The sound and rhythm disguise the evolving argument or question that are tied up so neatly in the last two lines. This then causes me to go back and relish the spaces and the thoughts and the still unanswered questions that are in the body before the volta and resolution. But I am usually a free-versearian by preference, and this comes through perhaps in the fact that I chose not to follow strict Sonnet meter conventions here. I agree with Bjorn that the most essential essence of the sonnet is that long argument/question, tied up with a turning volta and a CLINCHER at the end. I have loved exploring this poem as a sonnet.
Jilly also encouraged us on the same project to consider enjambment in sonnet form. Here is the link to her post as well.
Enjambment in Sonnets
All rights reserved for text to Lona Gynt, January, 2019. Image Credit at top of post: Credit: NASA/JPL-Caltech, accessed at the following link: https://www.space.com/31933-quantum-entanglement-action-at-a-distance.html
Image at the footer is from Lona Gynt, during a trip in SL to “Dreamers” by Cica Ghost.