Walking the Dog on the Fairway at 9 pm
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Walking the dog on the fairway at 9 pm
By Lona Gynt, August 2019.
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I.
I have never
Taken up golf.
Life has always
Been too full
Of other things
I love to do already
For which there
Is no time.
Like holding you
As I used to
When we thought
We knew the score,
When we left and came
Together at every
Placement tasting daily
The certainty lifting off
The rivers like a breeze
Whispering an end to the
Green and weight
Of summer air
Turning crisply in the
Times and seasons
Of what our
Love was for.
.
II.
Now I am here
In the darkness
Standing near the
Grass so clipped
And scrubbed
That even the
Lightning bugs
Have fled to
More obscure
Corners beyond
Reach of whatever
It might be
We are allowed to
Be spraying these days.
You are not that
Far away, sitting
In our home
Quietly, studying the
World that finds us
In our phones,
Divided from each other
By neither distance nor
The hand of crepitude, but
By the lifting of layers,
As when the green
Starts fading
From the leaves
Not to whither, but
To burn
With colors
That were
Simply waiting
To be seen.
.
III.
But it is too
Dark now
To care
About that, how
Could you have known
I was there
When that person who
We thought I was
Fought so strongly
Holding me down
Beneath the waters with
Those hands, and
Press of breathings…
Small wonder
You did not see me
Until he faded.
He did not end
With a crash or a bang
Or a loosening of the hold,
Or even with a whimper,
But just the
Weightless passing
That brought me
To the sunlight,
Shining now
A short time
From branches
Draping red
And orange and gold
Before the
Snows descend.
.
IV.
I never let
You know me,
So now you cannot
Want me.
So here I stand
Fairly certain only
That the grass here
Still greens at noontime,
And my dog is
In her first heat
And so, is tugging
Tautly in her leash
Seeking exposition
Of other mysteries,
And that strand
Of weary starlight
Hurtling out
From the furnaces
Of a dead epoch
Passing first the
Silver clouds silent
Above the trees
Breaching entry
To my eyes
To be grappled, crushed,
Wrestled and destroyed,
Forged to some
New thing
From what it was,
Landing in the
Rounded nesting
Of my mind,
Becoming
What it sees.
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This poem is also available in the publication listed below 🙂
January 2020:
Three poems accepted to the annual anthology for Out Loud HSV
“Walking the Dog on the Fairway at 9 pm”
“So you think you are better than Lady Macbeth”
“Come Soft Snows”
Available soon at this site:
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-Lona Gynt August 2019.
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This is posted for dVerse Open Link Night (OLN) hosted by Mish. Here is the link
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But I had wanted to link it to Amaya’s dVerse prompt for “Smoke and Mirrors.” But I was late…
This is a wonderful prompt. Here is the link:
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Since my poem takes place on a golf course, I am going to give you all sorts of links. Amaya gives us a version of “The Panther” by Rilke in her post. I have never found a version as beautiful as the original German. But I think the most wonderful English translation is by Walter Arndt. Here is a link to a site that has five different translations. Find the one by Arndt, and tell me if I’m not right. 🙂
http://picture-poems.com/rilke/panther.html
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All rights reserved for text and images by Lona Gynt August 2019.
Recited at Out Loud Huntsville, Open Mic Night 10-27-19. Accepted for publication in Huntsville Anthology for January 20120
Lovely poem Lona.
❤️✌️
BY FOR NOW
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Thank you so much Dawn
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Your welcome dear.
❤️✌️
BY FOR NOW
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All 18 holes? That could be interesting. My husband is a golfer, serious golfer.
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No, I don’t often walk all 18 holes, usually a 3-5 mile loop of the paths closest to our home. At night. It is pretty peaceful and cool, and the management does not mind as long as we keep it clean. Coyotes and deer also frequent it at night. Saw a skunk at dusk once, I turuned around briskly.
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Wonderful, deep.
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Thank you for swimming in it with me. I do appreciate it.
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Most welcome
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. lots of layers in this, Lona. Well written.
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Thank you Mary.
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Ahh, this is so good…I read it without stopping, no glitches, no false notes,no words tripping over themselves…it’s seamless…wonderful…one to come back to, again and again..JIM
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Thank you Jim. I am very grateful.
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The progression of this is lovely and bittersweet…I have always made the choice that golf takes too much time, but if I lost what I had maybe there would be a comfort in taking it up.
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It’s funny, Jane said in response to my smoke and mirrors poem that we need to pick away our layers to know ourselves. You have expressed this beautifully. And as I said in response to her, I’m still a work in progress. Perhaps we always are. (K)
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We indeed are, I am going over to look at that poem soon. Thank you Kerfe
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Wow Lona, what a wonderful walk, through the seasons of the year, through the seasons of a life, through a long unfolding search, to a discovery of truth — excellent, coherent, genuine writing! A pleasure to read!
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Thank you Rob, It brings me joy to see that you have been able to see so many layer of the journey here. Makes my day, very insightful and gorgeous reading. Thank you my friend!
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You are welcome Lona. Authentic writing, like this, is inspiring and makes great sense, offering an insight to the poet and the world. Too damned many poets write simply to be as bloody obscure as possible, with no real substance behind the words — or substance only they can decode. Why even write in that case. I am getting close, here in my old age, to simply passing on any poem that has not provided some grist to grind early in the reading. It just wastes my time, and I ain’t got much time left. See how grumpy I am getting.
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That makes me smile Rob. 🙂 Thank you.
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Lona,
There is so much that is right in front of us that we cannot see or hear. These are are lines that resonated with me most in your poem.
“As when the green
Starts fading
From the leaves
Not to whither, but
To burn
With colors
That were
Simply waiting
To be seen.”
I also enjoyed the cause and effect of the human relationships and the connection to nature in this poem. Great read.
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Thank you Ali, the carotenoids and the xanthophylls will finally have their day. I appreciate your reading.
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SO many layers here … love that “world where our phones find us …”
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Thank you Kate… brb got to get this text…
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Ok back, Kate. I think I was saying, glad you noticed the phone bit, wanted to put a bit of the screen between ourselves and the stars, I mean, it is where we live. 😉
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sadly too much … but love how you answered on the screen, emphasised your point!
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Hi Lona, I had to come see who it was that taught me a new word tonight.
I always do a bit of a sigh when I go to read other poems. Mostly those from Instagram who say “please read my poem”. I’m usually cringing by the second line and abandon it by the 6th. I cannot handle the destruction of such a beautiful art.
Here, the more poems I read the more in awe I am of the people’s minds that think then up.
I love how matter-of-factly, yet eloquently you detail the transition of yourself all the while loving someone who can’t see you, knowing it’s not their fault. Yea… Very cool.
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Oh Lyn, hello. This is such a wonderful and succinct rendering of so much of the heart of the poem, I believe you may have picked the locks to its center. I am so grateful that this came through. Yes, I have changed, it is matter-of-fact at this point, strange that it should be so, even still. And how I love her… and recognize how inextricably unfair and difficult it is for her. Much like with myself, I cannot blame her, I can only thank her. Thank you also new friend, a wonderful reading. Your poem is really nice, welcome to dVerse. I haunt it when I can, which is not nearly as often as I would like. It is good to have you here.
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Seeing beyond the words is the gift of a poet. Lol you are most welcome. We will meet again.
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I’m not a deep reader into trans experience — so forgive my lack of adroit language — but this is one of the clearest expressions of the immense difficulties finding identity in the hottest darkness of the intimate I-Thou. It’s a great scene for it–walking on the edges of golf course at night, wholly useless at that hour to daylight purposes, alive and vibrant in so many more ways. It is like walking on the edge of a self that only reveals itself at that hour. The short lines allow us to read quickly a descending path into an interior that is made lustrous in memory and grief, yet walks on about the daily, nightly business of living forward. I can’t see how the heart can be at all visible in an Instagram post, it takes five translations and the original to see just how the darkness of the panther is magnified by the small amount of light along the edges of the bars, and how much is coiled facing away from simple observation, like the magnitude of a golf course seen only at night. Good hard work, friend, and accomplished close to pitch perfect.
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Thank you for this my friend. Your reading is always an instruction and a song to me. So much of my life is as you describe, apparently useless to so many, who either do not know who I am, or if they have the chance to see me may consider me a useless anachronism, useless to the usual purpose. But the world is less of what it shouldn’t be in some way, and this gives me hope for the future, congenital optimist, or as Mary Chapin Carpenter has sung… perhaps a magical thinker. But a reading such as this, it is just simply wonderful, and I am grateful. There is memory, and there is grief, but also vibrant new colors, and your words, I feel they hold my heart in their hands. Thank you.
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(You’re right about Arndt, even if the rhythm is a bit staggering. But who’s life flows in captivation? I really went off the beaten path with that other translation, apparently.)
Oh my God. I don’t say that in vain. Our God is with you, my beloved friend. In perhaps your most tender piece of writing, you touch the place most in need of reflection and transformation in the whole of the human psyche: our relationship to our innate nature. Your courage in going there, when the rest of us want to keep spraying, keep saying “I am green, I am green, I am green!” True love is impervious to life’s seasons, but acts as the axis spinning in the center out of simple devotion to the world.
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*whose life flows
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Thank you my dear Amaya. I also feel that our God is with us, for all of it, height and depths. This is a tender piece, and I am grateful with how it came together, I have to admit that I thought about shopping it around a bit, but I did not have the patience, if I am honest, to delay letting you and Brendan see it. The readings you have each given from slightly different polarities is a bounteous compensation. There are things about each of us that we can strive to overcome, but then there is indeed an innate nature to each of us that I believe is divine, and at this point I feel a peaceful connection leading me in my pilgrimage. You have given me a pretty far-raching addition to my mantras:
“True love is impervious to life’s seasons, but acts as the axis spinning in the center out of simple devotion to the world.” You are such a blessing to me.
Oh and about Rilke’s Panther… I actually really like the translation you found by Lemont in your post. I do like the rhythm of Lemont’s last line better than Arndt’s, but I like the Arndt’s general rhyming and structure better. I might be tickling the toes of the giant to suggest that Arndt’s last line could have been:
“Stillness—only in the heart to end.”
I love that Arndt used the word lissom. I am always reminded of the need to look beyond the bars of our structures by Rilke’s heart rending cat.
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I apologize for not writing sooner. My first thought upon reading your poem was to share it on my blog, but now since I only use the site for dVerse prompts and made it invisible to the Reader, I’m not sure any more eyes would see it besides the disciples here. It was astonishing. I hope you do submit some of your work to journals but of course I’m grateful to get to see your poems in real time:) Speaking of real, it sounds like you’re dealing with it now in a more public way than it’s been before. May God be your strength, dear Lona, and may the people in your life see that He’s got you. When you see it how God does, we really don’t have much in common with Rilke’s cat. Not today.
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…. Not today…. increment of eternity.
I like that. See it how God does. I guess the bars will all be turning into doors. You have helped me today.
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Enthralling. This poem is built like a path of reality and truth (the only one worth following). I like the way it crescendos in intensity but at the same time, the voice is composed, unfaltering….there is a peacefulness within the words. This has to be one of my favourites of yours….so far.
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Thank you Mish. I do feel like I was blessed to have this one come to me, and there is a peace that I feel at this particular time. I am so grateful you saw this aspect.
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This is a beautiful and bittersweet poem. I read it and became increasingly aware of my own loneliness, even as one who greatly enjoys his alone time.
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Thank you Barry. The loneliness is not so great. But it has its compensations.
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Metamorphosis that tick-tocks like the clock. I love the photo, where the brightness of the moon is partially obscured by the twigs, but soon it will rise high in the sky, in all of its glory. Your poem is deep cool water in the night.
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Thank you Jade. Deep cool water, so lovely.
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You are very welcome, Lona.
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Though no one would call this a fun poem, I enjoyed reading it, out loud because of it’s conversational sincerity and the depths of an inner world exposed in such a simple moment. It is a
sweet-sad, not bitter, poem which has, I imagine, a relatable sigh for anyone who reads it regardless of their circumstances. Touching. Thank you Lona. Can you help me understand more of the last moon and brain section? Only if you want to though.
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Anything for you Kristen. I am grateful bitterness isn’t felt here,. About the fourth stanza, I would love to comment, but the interesting puzzle about poetry is that the reading can be as personal as the writing. So I might hesitate to superimpose my thoughts to clearly since this is a poem and not an expository. This poem started to germinate with me thinking about how it could be if we were like starlight that travels across vast distances, to land on our retina and is changed from ancient photic energy into neural energy, a physical presence in our brain composed of neurotransmitters and neurons and networks, becoming an actual part of us, in a sense becoming the thing that it is seeing or remembering. This seems a very intimate act, and accompanies that longing for a human correlate in our relationships, when we are seen and held by another, do we influence the other sufficiently that they become what they see to a degree, do they change? This is hard especially as the constituents of the “I-thou” develop or unlayer themselves, it becomes difficult. But it is certainly a blessing to have been held, even if only for a season.
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