Stream
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What are you
That would make me stop
And visit
On my walk
When it is so heavy hot
That even the bees
Seem languid
And the trees spreading
Some little
Bit of green
And cooling shade are closer
Than the time it takes
For just half
Of ‘Layla’ to play.
The sun is
Stretching out
And burns the skin left naked
By the boundary
In my hair
And furthermore there
Is nowhere
To sit but
Down here next to you and stare
And ask the question
What drew me
To your tiny bank
So small I
Could have bound
You fifty years ago with
Just two shakes of a
Toddler’s shanks?
Yet still, I am here.
I guess I
Never saw
You here before near the
Starting of the trail
I always
Hurry to get somewhere
And looping
Back later
Before the dark I wouldn’t
Rest my weary feet
Pacing to
Where the car is parked.
But today
You made me
Listen to your silent voice
And rustling of white
Weed something-
Or-others blooming
In snowy
Petulance
And the lazy bending of
The grass showing the
Uncertain
Declension of your
Stream not so
Much downward
To the sinking past our view
As upwards
With unseen
Rivers returning
To that patch
Of lightened
Memory filling the large and
Sleeping field of blue.
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Posted for dVerse Poetry Pub Prompt “Descriptive Detail” hosted by Frank. Join us there as we get down into the weeds. The Heaven is is the details. Here is the link:
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All rights for text and photos to Lona Gynt, September 2019.
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Very nice description of that flowing water one almost missed. I especially like the last two lines with the large and sleeping field of blue. It reminds me how amazed I am finally seeing what I’ve seen many times.
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That is one of the wonderful tricks to this beautiful world, to see what we have missed. I appreciate you Frank, thank you.
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Dreamy and timeless and carries me gently to the best place~
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Thank you Amaya, casting bread upon the waters
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Rivers returning, yes indeed.
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Thank you Paul
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Very welcome indeed.
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Every other day, while heading somewhere I’ve been countless times, something catches my eye, something being built, or torn down, a 1956 Packard parked in the shade next to a house, its patina sparkling, a pair of bison grazing in an empty lot. They say we use very little of our perceptual and cognitive abilities. As poets, I’d like to think we have trained ourselves to pay attention to details. As a photographer, I take it a step further.
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That reply is in itself is full of descriptive detail and feels like a wonderful prose poetry Glen, but a Haiku on the end and you are ready for one of the Haibun Mondays. We do live far outside our license as humans in noticing the beauties in the little corners and brooks as well as the wonder in the vault of heaven. I heard a quote once that poetry is the fastest way to get from this shit to the stars… well sometimes this “shit” the mundane little everyday beauties are so overpowering in their voice and spectrum and nuance that the stars are just left sparkling in jealousy. The little things, right?
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Your descriptions are delightful! Seems most of us rush and rush until life’s no fun!
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Right! and the kicker is we may not even know why! – fun for an Alabama girl to her an Alabama lyric 😉
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I’m always amazed when I really notice something I must have seen over and over again without it registering in my consciousness. And it does lead somehow to a slowing of time as the details fill in the space that has been left empty in the past. I love the leisurely pace too. Hurry is a great distraction to seeing. (K)
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yes! that bit of yours about time here is very true. There is a universe in a grain of sand and eternities in a moment. Those moments of stillness are beautiful and connected. I must remember this…
” does lead somehow to a slowing of time as the details fill in the space that has been left empty in the past.”
Thank you for that.
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One of my biggest faults is not paying attention, so I know those empty spaces well.
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Lovely poem Lona. 😀
❤️✌️
BY FOR NOW
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Thank you Dawn. Always a joy to see you! 🙂
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Your welcome dear. 😀
❤️✌️
BY FOR NOW
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So many perfect little phrases in this.
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Thank you Xan, that is joyful for me to hear. 🙂
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Excellent writing Loa — wonderful descriptors — languid bees, strains of ‘Layla’ rising… very cool!
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Thanks Rob. I am glad you liked it! 🙂
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So true that I wrote in a long-ago poem, “what in youth we took for granted, in old age we have time to savor.”
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Yes, even as time compresses more. 🙂
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So much to love in your description which most of all sets the mood by using all the senses… the description of time as half the time of “Layla” is great, it also gives a reference to yourself I think.
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Thank you Björn. 🎶
Yes, on my walks I mark time by music, but it was also nice to just hear this brook that day
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I like how the stream in your photo also reflects the sky, mirroring your reflection on those condensating drops of river that fill the sky at the end of your poem. Thanks for sharing!
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That reflection was why I took the photo that day, and the reason it brought me back to the poem. Thought you might notice that 😉
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